[讨论]落选征文的一首诗《梅州的梅》作者王鸿翔

王鸿翔

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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体">梅州的梅<span lang=EN-US><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p></span></span></b></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 252pt; mso-char-indent-count: 24.0"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">作者：王鸿翔<span lang=EN-US><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">（</span><span lang=EN-US>1</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">）</span><span lang=EN-US><o:p></o:p></span></b></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">从冬天到达春天的过程，面对梅花</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">马背裹挟的芬芳</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">轻盈着足履探出墙头</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">一群候鸟苏醒之前，风在天空哗哗流淌</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">火红的深情仿佛被诗歌携带</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">行走多少年</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">缘定一缕阳光，这一刻在梅州</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">唇间烂漫持续不断</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">像谁家飘荡笑声的婴孩</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">“我是被季节放逐欢乐”</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">那一句阳光下的炫耀，如此</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">不可逆转</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">（</span><span lang=EN-US>2</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">）</span><span lang=EN-US><o:p></o:p></span></b></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">是流水忘记了</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">十里梅溪岸畔，我呆呆的自语</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">忽然苍老的容颜</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">倏然间站在唐宋王朝的门槛</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">季节咽喉被谁卡住，这么固执</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">这么婉约地深入</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">我想起你当年的笑声</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">伴着春天的鸽哨落入心头</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">而我一直在默不作声，离海很近</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">离山很近，离天空也很近</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">（</span><span lang=EN-US>3</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">）</span><span lang=EN-US><o:p></o:p></span></b></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">把酒对梅，一曲凄迷的惊艳</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">牵扯南岭浮云</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">金戈铁马万里纵横的呐喊</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">越不过一树梅花</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">梅州，这个梅香盈盈的传奇</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">如今沉浸一杯芳菲</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">凭窗漫咏的诗句穿越号角尘烟</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">回荡季节更迭的江湖</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">昨夜心思如梅</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">风过暗香淋漓的梅州</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">听见谁在轻吟“兴爽春衣沾露湿</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">情高秋思落诗魂。”</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">（</span><span lang=EN-US>4</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">）</span><span lang=EN-US><o:p></o:p></span></b></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">梅花轻轻点燃冬天</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">沐雪而歌</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">朝南的窗口爱情充盈</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">誓约的妩媚停泊哪段旅程</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">我不停的纠缠自己，从梅州回到梅州</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">带一朵小小花红</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">我向你伸出手，岁月呆在墙角多么安静</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang=EN-US><o:p>&nbsp;</o:p></span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">是被谁悄然抚摸的梦境，背对冬天</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">藏匿孤独的灿烂</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">一只花丛中的小鸟衔着婉婉心思</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">而你在欢快的时光中故作姿态</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">淡泊地写诗</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">（</span><span lang=EN-US>5</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">）</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">梅花燃烧在旷野</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">梅花燃烧在乡村</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">梅花燃烧在城市街头</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">给每个人穿上厚厚的红棉袄</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">在心里那团火呼呼的，不停的跳跃</span></p>
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<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">举起酒杯，时光追逐的梅州之梅</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">在阳光照耀的南方</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">温暖多么奢侈，多么像春天中</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">一个刚刚走出家门</span></p>
<p class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'">哼着歌曲快乐着奔跑的孩子</span></p>
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时空Amay

祝贺楼主获得一等奖， 写得真好
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<br />梅花轻轻点燃冬天
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<br />沐雪而歌
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<br />朝南的窗口爱情充盈
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<br />誓约的妩媚停泊哪段旅程
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<br />我不停的纠缠自己，从梅州回到梅州
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<br />带一朵小小花红
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<br />我向你伸出手，岁月呆在墙角多么安静
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<br />这一段我最喜欢， 呵呵

笔天

[:2-1:]

时空Amay

不好意思搞错了， 不过楼主写的也真好啊，

王鸿翔

“组委会将邀请国内知名诗人、作家担任评委，本着公平、公正、公开的原则，从参赛作品中评选出48篇优秀作品”去看看他们对获奖作品的点评可能会有帮助。梅花燃烧在旷野
<br />梅花燃烧在乡村
<br />梅花燃烧在城市街头
<br />这里敝人觉得欠妥
<br />梅花有时并不一定就是现实中的梅花，他可能是一种意象或者象征，也可能是人们传统节日穿着的红衣服的连带的思维幻觉。

王鸿翔

所谓48篇优秀诗歌我读了，应该说里面还是有很不错的，各有各不同的思路，但是我敢说也有相当一部分还不尽人意，我自己是搞诗歌评论的，二十多年来也积累了一定的经验，这次评奖无论文学性还是思想性，都应该与主办者公布出来的初衷有很大的差距。

ＭΙào 嫲

  

庄子亮

你的诗歌很好，但没有好到岂有此理，因此落选也是情理之中。伟华获奖，靠的是绝对的实力。
<br />其他二，三等奖，鱼龙混杂， [:2-1:] 倒不排除有猫腻。

夜色光明

不错，可以进三甲